Polishing my query, again......

I am polishing up my query in hopes of sending it out later today. There are so many different sites with suggestions on how to write one. I have attempted to follow the honest approach.

What do you think? Would it prompt you to want to read it?

Dear Dream Agent,

In The One, my completed 87,000 word Inspirational Romantic Sci/Fi, God creates two people, meant to be One, and places them on different worlds. He directs the Guardian Angels to bring the man, Seth, to the woman’s world, but neither angels nor humans know if Seth will choose to listen to God in order to find the one created for him.

Seth Locke opens his eyes to find he is no longer in his room, and he is no longer on earth. He has been moved to Arland, a world where the people can see and hear their Guardian Angels. Seth is told he was brought to this new land to fulfill his calling, but that cannot happen until he finds the One woman God created for him. He feels drawn to Lilli, the first woman he meets, but is uncertain if she is his One. That would be too easy! As Seth falls deeper and deeper in love with Lilli, he questions her feelings. Seth works up the courage to ask her if she is available and finds out Lilli has found her One. He assumes it is someone else and runs away demanding his Guardian Asher send him back to Earth. He wakes up on Earth forgetting everything about Arland, but troubled by dreams of a woman named Lilli, he decides to search for her everywhere.

The One is my first novel which I wrote with a goal to reach single women who are between 14 and 25, aiming to give them encouragement and hope in the search for their one.

My resume includes multiple opportunities as a spokesperson and a peer counselor. I have spoken to groups as large as 3,000 people, and have also worked in many churches as a youth director. I enjoy working with people of all ages and encouraging them to live their lives to the fullest.

I am in the process of submitting this query to multiple agents, but would be thrilled if you chose to represent me. I request permission to submit my full manuscript for your review.

Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Book Review of BoneMan's Daughters

BoneMan's Daughters by Ted Dekker

My review

rating: 5 of 5 stars
I LOVED the Bone Man's Daughters. I won't rehash the entire story because others have done a great job summarizing it. I'm sure you get the idea by now. So I'll tell you why I liked it so much.


I'm married to a guy in the Army and could identify with the main characters Brittany, Celine and Ryan. In the military and a few other jobs, others safety must come first, but there is always collateral damage. Sadly, it’s the families that sustain terrible damage. Not having a husband, wife, father or mother around because someone else needs them more is difficult to deal with.


Ted Dekker was able to create a believable story using these characters. Sadly the situation they found themselves in is very true to life. -not with the Bone Man but as a Military family- The service member comes home to a house, not a wife, not children, but to something he/she no longer is a part of. The life is not an easy one and to make it successful, each person has to work hard. Dekker was able to write a very true to life story based on this loss of family, and how Ryan, the main character realizes what he has lost, but is it too late?


Hooah to all the Military Families fighting daily beside our Service men and women.


This book kept me turning the pages and guessing at what would come next. I’m happy to say that I wasn’t disappointed. I enjoyed the writing style and the glimpses into different character's thoughts and ideas. Very well written and suspenseful.


I would recommend this to anyone who is not too squeamish.



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Book Review of The Noticer

The Noticer

by Andy Andrews

Thomas Nelson Publisher

A small town is frequently visited by Jones, an old man of no discernable age. He comes and goes as he pleases passing valuable lessons to those in need, encouraging each person he meets, and giving them nuggets of perspective that grow into life changing habits.

The Noticer is full of lessons written as parables, making them come to life and have deeper meaning. I have never written down so many quotes from one book. The Noticer was full of them and I even tweeted a few to my friends. This is a book I plan to read and re-read through out my life. I enjoyed each moment of it and will be giving this great book to family and friends for the holidays.

I read this book as a member of Thomas Nelson's Book Review Blogger Program found here: http://brb.thomasnelson.com/

Can't wait to review more of their books.

UPDATE: They sent me the book in hard cover for FREE! Just for reviewing this book. So shocked and happy! Thanks TN!

Out of the loop for a bit...

Hey All, Remember the post (http://tinyurl.com/r9ohkn) where I mentioned having to give up my wedding rings? Well, I went to see a hand specialist last Friday and he diagnosed me with a Ganglion Cyst. Yup, the joy of my life, writing, has caused me to have a cyst.

I think it's funny! But am not too happy that I can't wear my wedding rings. The pain is, well, a pain. Each time I go to grip something or grab something I hit that part of my finger. My son is so proud that he can open jars that mommy can't. I refuse to tell him it is because of my cyst. Hahaha

If you are a new writer, I would recommend removing your wedding ring before you spend 10-12 hours every day typing. My lesson is now learned.

My wonderful Dr. will remove the cyst in the AM and I might not be able to type for about a week. I plan to have my daughter update you all on Twitter.

Today I have been shopping and prepping things so at least we will be fed and hope the house can withstand my lack of attention. My hubby and kids are usually great helpers and I have no doubt they will attempt to keep things clean.

So until next week,

Blessings

Have you seen this Book Trailer?

This is a great book for writers and readers interested in learning about the agent world.

Agent Demystified:



I love how dramatic our lives appear, and how true to life it is.

You can purchase the book here: http://www.authoresspress.com/

The Authoress is on a quest to spread this video like the flu. So here is my germ filled addition.

Playing with my One Line Hook, again......

Hello All,

I am spending the day inside while the rain and sun play chase outside my window, creating the perfect day for brushing up my One Line Hook and finishing the selection for this month's Book Club.

What do you think of this One Line Hook?

When God creates two people, meant to be One, and places them on different worlds, He directs the Guardian Angels to bring the man, Seth, to the woman’s world, but neither angels nor humans know if Seth will choose to listen to God in order to find the one created for him.

Is it better than the ones below? Any and all comments welcome.

Thanks!
Blessings

Something About Me.....

Rachelle Gardner put out a writing exercise today. You can find it here: http://cba-ramblings.blogspot.com/2009/05/something-about-you.html

The mission: Write about yourself in the third person. Tell us something we wouldn't guess simply from the fact that you read this blog. And do it in a maximum of 100 words.

As usual, I read this and started searching for answers. I love a writing challenge, but writing about myself is not an easy thing to do!

I reviewed my current titles, trials and joys. My life played out before me like a movie and through it all He, Jesus Christ, was there. So I started playing around and here is what I came up with.

Andrea is a woman, claimed by me before her mother knew she was there.

I have given her a husband so she could glimpse a small portion of my love for her, and children to show her my promises and joy.

I have been with her through pain, abuse, trials, and healing. I have shown her others who don’t have me, going through the same, which has given her my heart for the hurt.


I have placed words in her mind and a drive to arrange them in a compelling story that will show my love and promise to all.


There it is; Andrea in 100 words. There was so much else about me I could say, but after it is all said and done, He is what my entire life is about.

My Christ!